Regarding the quotations, from Emily, et al.
Do children really talk (write) like that? Better spoken (written) than many adults!
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JW.org Childrens Page: Expanding My Circle Of Friends
by pale.emperor inhttps://www.jw.org/en/bible-teachings/family/teenagers/worksheets/expanding-circle-of-friends/.
some things of note here, it looks to me that they're encouraging young ones to befriend older people and "people not like them".
could this be because many of the young ones are now leaving?.
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Good Morning!
by snowbird ingood morning, all.. it is good to be here.. thanks to all for your contributions.. love and blessings.
sylvia.
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Went to Australia -- 14 hours on Quantas, and that was only part of the journey. It was a bad time to have "tummy troubles" . . .
Never was so happy to deplane.
Best.
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Good Morning!
by snowbird ingood morning, all.. it is good to be here.. thanks to all for your contributions.. love and blessings.
sylvia.
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Good Morning!
by snowbird ingood morning, all.. it is good to be here.. thanks to all for your contributions.. love and blessings.
sylvia.
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Have a lovely day, Sylvia, et al!
Blessings and Peace.
A "six-dog week" for me! Fortunately, not all of them at once!
Mom kept extensive, detailed journals. She enumerated all her jobs, as a "'Jean' of all trades." Well, I'm "Jack"!
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Do you know about dialogue tags and action beats?
by compound complex ingreetings, fellow posters:.
before i give my own answer to the above, kindly read this silly little mother/daughter scenario i came up with for the writing class i teach.
it has to do with how to write more effectively.. thanks!.
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Nancy and Sylvia could work together as a writing team . . .
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Do you know about dialogue tags and action beats?
by compound complex ingreetings, fellow posters:.
before i give my own answer to the above, kindly read this silly little mother/daughter scenario i came up with for the writing class i teach.
it has to do with how to write more effectively.. thanks!.
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Thanks, Nancy!
Yours is a good example of interspersing dialogue with narrative. You are showing what's happening and readers get a sense of the relationship between mom and daughter.
Good show!
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Do you know about dialogue tags and action beats?
by compound complex ingreetings, fellow posters:.
before i give my own answer to the above, kindly read this silly little mother/daughter scenario i came up with for the writing class i teach.
it has to do with how to write more effectively.. thanks!.
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You're welcome, Syl!
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Do you know about dialogue tags and action beats?
by compound complex ingreetings, fellow posters:.
before i give my own answer to the above, kindly read this silly little mother/daughter scenario i came up with for the writing class i teach.
it has to do with how to write more effectively.. thanks!.
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OUTLAW:
Good one. Yeah, she'll still be ugly!*********************
Sylvia:
Excellent!
Inexperienced writers think "he said," "she asked" become so boringly repetitive that they must tart up the dialogue tags with insane examples, such as I used in the first entry. Nix the adverbs.
Example 2, and your fine writing, do more to show, rather than tell, what the characters are thinking and/or doing. The simple and recommended dialogue tags (said/asked) actually become "invisible," unhampered by overuse of "Tom Swifties":
I need a pencil sharpener," said Tom bluntly."Oops! There goes my hat!" said Tom off the top of his head."I can no longer hear anything," said Tom deftly."I have a split personality," said Tom, being frank."This must be an aerobics class," Tom worked out."I couldn't believe there were 527,986 bees in the swarm!" Tom recounted."Don't you know my name?" asked Tom swiftly."Your fly is undone," was Tom's zippy rejoinder."I only have diamonds, clubs and spades," said Tom heartlessly."Don't add too much water," said Tom with great concentration."I wonder if there's a number between seven and nine," said Tom considerately."I manufacture tabletops for shops," said Tom counter-productively."It's not fair!" said Tom darkly."I haven't had any tooth decay yet," said Tom precariously. -
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Do you know about dialogue tags and action beats?
by compound complex ingreetings, fellow posters:.
before i give my own answer to the above, kindly read this silly little mother/daughter scenario i came up with for the writing class i teach.
it has to do with how to write more effectively.. thanks!.
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OUTLAW:
Great, as usual! THANKS!
Just thought of a real-life scene between Winston Churchill and Lady Astor (I think):
"If you were my husband, I'd give you poison!"
"If you were my wife, I'd drink it!"
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Do you know about dialogue tags and action beats?
by compound complex ingreetings, fellow posters:.
before i give my own answer to the above, kindly read this silly little mother/daughter scenario i came up with for the writing class i teach.
it has to do with how to write more effectively.. thanks!.
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Greetings, fellow posters:
Before I give my own answer to the above, kindly read this silly little mother/daughter scenario I came up with for the writing class I teach. It has to do with how to write more effectively.
THANKS!
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“I can’t do this anymore,” Mary sighed wearily.
“What can I do to help? Mother implored beseechingly.
“I don’t know, I just don’t know,” Mary intoned breathlessly.
“Well, I’m going to make you a cup of restoring tea,” Mother quipped reassuringly.
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“I can’t do this anymore,” said Mary. Weary from long hours at work and sleepless nights, she looked at the pile of laundry on the back porch floor and groaned. Detritus covered furniture and floor from days and days of inattention to the house’s general upkeep.
“What can I do to help?” Mother asked. Knowing her daughter all too well, Margaret was careful, when visiting Mary, not to take charge and start cooking and cleaning unasked. She waited for her daughter to respond, keeping her habit to be a helicopter mom in check.
“I don’t know, I just don’t know,” Mary replied. She welcomed Mother’s help, but shouldn’t she be able to run her household and career effortlessly? Maybe I should toss my pride aside and let her help, Mary thought to herself, knowing her eager mother would have the house all spic and span and dinner on the table in one hour. She waited . . . and waited. . . .
“Well, I’m going to make you a cup of restoring tea,” Mother said.
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You finish the scene, if you like!